我們都12歲了，一定經(jīng)歷了不少事情，哪一天是你過的最有意義的一天呢?當(dāng)我提問之際，你心里就已經(jīng)有答案了，可是你能用英文來描述嗎，你不妨嘗試一下。

　　《a day》

　　yesterday,I played in the park.I'm played swing very happy.suddenly,I saw a girl,she is cried.I walked up to ask:"What do you cry?"she is said:"My mother is disappear."I decision helped she look for her mother.

　　I dry she's one's eyes,belted she What goes aroun,but from beginning to ending no look her mother.at this time,a woman taked up to we,she holded to the girl,said:"Oh,my baby!"to combine commend to me.I'm is very happy.

　　點評：文章開頭點題，用到過去式，語法正確，不過出現(xiàn)了錯誤單詞，希望作者繼續(xù)努力。